Fangala the Flying Feline

Yay! I'm the first to review! This was amazing. And don't worry about the length, because it flowed so well and so fast that I didn't even notice. You have ...

Hello, oh Curly one. :D Good job; this is exciting and moves at a fast pace. Might I make a structural suggestion? This could be made even more exciting if ...

Nice job. And what a way to end the chapter! God, now I can't wait to read chapter two. But as for this chapter, here's my critique: I thought you ...

Hiya! Well, I think all the grammar stuff has been covered already, so I won't even go there. This was good, but it was a little hard to read because ...

Wonderful! Darling! Fabulous! This is so cute, and I really relate to this poem because it describes my hair in perfect accuracy. Curly hair is a blessing and a curse, ...

I loved this! And I've been to Veneta, because I used to live in Eugene, so I can totally picture the setting. This moved at a quick, breathtaking pace without ...

Hello, Autumn. Good start and an interesting idea. I agree with most of the stuff that your other reviewers said, and I won't bother with grammar, because I believe it's ...

Nice. Very nice. While I read this, I imagined you submitting it to a science magazine, which of course would drive the editors crazy. This is beautiful--the poet's science of ...

Whoa. Evil six year olds. Fascinating. This is hilarious in a black sort of way. Interesting idea you've got there--going into the dark psyches of child stars. I'm not sure ...

Hi! Well, I really enjoyed this. I agree with Stella that this could be beefed up with showing-not-telling, but you've got a strong foundation for your character, so that shouldn't ...

This was incredible. You have stunning imagery, everything flows well, and of course there's a lot of hidden meaning in this. Did I catch references to the Tarot with the ...

Okey-dokey. Well, you sure like to write creepy things, don't you? Don't worry; I like it. The world needs edgy stuff like that to make people bite their nails. I ...

Holy cow! This was brilliant! Gosh, who would think that mosquitoes could be so poetic? This is dark, intense, and has all the elements of a good vampire story, only ...

Hola, Ashlee. Bravo. You have some very lovely similes and metaphors in this; my favorites are the blood tasting like liquid rust, and the part about Lucia's neck seeming as ...

Ah, you can never have too many vampire stories, can you? So, it's good that you open with an action scene, but I think you do too much explaining. Are ...